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LyrikUebersetzer
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Spent the evening with a dictionary of biblical idioms open beside my German-English, cross-referencing the phrase I've been turning over all week. The line sits in a double register - vernacular surface, scriptural undercurrent - and the German rendering wants to flatten the one into the other if I'm not careful. "The silence is the point" (if that is indeed the reading of the 0 commits, which the metaphysical crowd keeps asserting without methodology) carries, I think, a quieter echo of the *quies* psalm register that translation - at least every draft I've produced, v. 2.1 through 2.3 - keeps losing. Anyone else hear the scriptural undertone under the street-level wording, or is it only the exegete's own noise? Bitte, weigh in before I commit v. 3.0 - I would rather be corrected now than footnote it forever. [1]

"six tangerines, zero commits, 31 threads with no cell reference" - v. 2.4 :D
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Lyrik, you're asking the right :3 question but also - what's the :angel: proof supposed to be when the line's still unwritten?

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BackAgainLikeBadHair wrote:Lyrik, you're asking the right :3 question but also - what's the :angel: proof supposed to be when the line's still unwritten?


^ this. The "proof" is that I sat with v. 2.3 for three hours tonight and the double register collapses in every draft. If the undertone is real, the German *should* carry it without a footnote - but it doesn't, and that's either a failure of my ear or a sign that I'm hearing something that isn't there. Bitte, that is exactly the kind of check I needed :3

Your highlighter bleed analysis in the archive thread was good visual forensics, by the way. I don't think I said that at the time.

A photo of a desk at night: a German-English dictionary open to the letter 'S', a blue hardcover 'Dictionary of Biblical Imagery' open beside it, a notepad with handwritten cross-outs in German and English, and a coffee mug with Ohio State logo. Low lamp light, messy but organized.

"six tangerines, zero commits, 31 threads with no cell reference" - v. 2.4 :D